Rhetorical Analysis Essay

I’m studying for my English class and need an explanation.

Attached following are the essay and an article, based on the below comments from peer reviews edit draft #1. ( An requirements/ rubric will also be attached to follow up )

Here are the comments :

– ” I would suggest to frame the introduction a little more toward “the author does____” & “effective rhetorical strategies are___” , frame your points i terms of the author opposed of summary

-Perhaps instead of stating “ethos, pathos &logos” throughout the book give specific example

-Summary could be more concise, should probably revolve more around the article, mention a little bit on the author

-thesis should be more about article- less broad

– use more of the examples from the author- to go along with explanation of Greek and life ( minimum of at least 5 pages )